• A B, almost 5 years ago

    Nice. I really like where it's going.


    • I would get rid of the social links at the top. Why tempt people to leave the site as soon as they've landed upon it?

    • Consider a different presentation for your projects than your portfolio page though, perhaps one or two key projects, with a CTA to view all projects beneath. Re-using the same presentation as the project page seems like a bit of a shortcut. You could break up the images and text into overlapping blocks as per iota.org if you wanted a more interesting presentation here.

    • Perhaps link to your latest writing piece on this page as well, again with a CTA to view your full writing page.

    • Basically use it as a portal to your other pages with CTA for each, but without using the same components over again.

    • Try dressing up the businesses you have worked with. Some designers scoff at the "logo graveyard" but the bullet point list on the landing page looks like it should be on the about page.


    • Maybe reduce the amount of descriptive writing under each project at this level. User behaviour is to scan, which is a struggle when you have this much visual noise. I become weary.

    • Instead of paragraphs, consider bullet points for role, sector, year and so on. This makes scanning much easier. The portfolio images look nice though, with the exception of the Envision image. Seems a bit too raw.

    Project Pages

    • You need to include a breakdown of the process, approach and methodology for each project. Illustrate your journey to the solution: work in progress, or sketches. It adds credence to your professionalism. At the moment there is just not enough info on each project. Linking off-site is not sufficient.

    Writing page

    • I appreciate the minimalism. Spacing seems a bit off all round. Maybe more padding around each link/descriptive block and less padding underneath the introduction.

    • Links may look good underlined, but they stand out well as it is.

    About page

    • Favourite page by far. I love this. No suggestions.

    Overall, great direction. Nice work.

    11 points
    • Ray Besiga, almost 5 years ago

      Hi AB.

      Thanks a lot for the detail in your feedback. I was furiously noting it all down then I realized I can just read it again and again on here. Will take your tips into consideration, improve upon the design and update the website. Thank you so much!


      2 points
  • Davey HollerDavey Holler, almost 5 years ago

    I'd look at using a different treatment on the citation for the testimonials. The larger, bolder, and highlighted treatment draws way more attention to the person rather than what they said. I'd reverse the typographic hierarchy there.

    Additionally, you've got some writing that could be improved. You should strive to hit a 7th grade reading level. I live by a tool called Hemingway App. Here's a screenshot of how your paragraph towards the bottom of the page performs.

    Hemingway Screen Shot

    3 points
    • Ray Besiga, almost 5 years ago

      Thanks, Davey. I have not used Hemingway app for ages but clearly, I need to get back to it. I will subject all my copy to the test.

      Regarding the testimonials, I will need to think about how to switch that around as the attention is being directed inversely to my intentions.

      0 points
  • Jim SilvermanJim Silverman, almost 5 years ago

    type effect is a bit slow.

    3 points
  • Daniel GoldenDaniel Golden, almost 5 years ago

    Completely unrelated to the topic: I've been to Kampala, it's a really interesting city.

    1 point
  • Josh PuckettJosh Puckett, almost 5 years ago

    Olyota Ssebo! I spent a summer in Kampala :)

    Things Working Well

    • Clear information about you, personally
    • Nice project blurbs upfront
    • Clear testimonials

    Things to Improve

    • I wanted to learn more about your projects, and clicked on Tribe Kampala and was surprised when it opened a new window taking me to the actual live website. Knowing this is real work that shipped is great! But I was expecting to see a case study of what you did and what problem you solved.
    • No Projects contain iterations, or example work. Similar to above, but I was surprised that every link
    1 point
    • Ray Besiga, almost 5 years ago

      Hey Josh! Gyendi Bulungi. Nsanyuse nyo kubanga oyogera oluganda!

      I am working to do a better job of presenting the project work, showing what the goal was, how it may have changed, how the project adapted to that, as well as the final product. Thanks for the feedback sebbo!

      0 points
  • Alex CarpenterAlex Carpenter, almost 5 years ago

    Great work! Love the Tribe Kampala landing page grid!

    1 point
  • Ken Em, almost 5 years ago

    Well, right off the bat: "Hi, I'm Ray Besiga. A based in Kampala, Uganda."

    It seems like you're missing a word or two there.

    0 points
    • Ray Besiga, almost 5 years ago

      Hi Ken M,

      Yeah, the type effect is a little delayed depending on how fast your connection is. Just came across typed.js so I am going to try that. Thanks for spotting that.

      0 points
      • Kyle ArbuckleKyle Arbuckle, almost 5 years ago

        I wanted to make a note about this as well. More specifically, a different solution to your capabilities or job description. Not necessarily this effect exactly, but https://wesbos.com/ achieves something similar, but gets away from the typing/deleting effect.

        1 point
        • Ray Besiga, almost 5 years ago

          Whoa Kyle! Thanks for this. He does it so well. I'll have a look and try to figure out how he did it.

          0 points
        • Ray Besiga, almost 5 years ago

          Hi Kyle, so I tried to do something similar to this Codepen but it seemed a little buggy and complex. Will keep looking for a similar solution. Cheers.

          0 points
          • Kyle ArbuckleKyle Arbuckle, almost 5 years ago

            Nice, glad you liked it!

            Wes is a Javascript champion so it may require more extensive JS rather than just a library.

            1 point