Uber's Undoing Part III: Redemption(elischiff.com)

over 4 years ago from Eli Schiff, elischiff.com

  • Eli SchiffEli Schiff, over 4 years ago

    This isn't a high school 5 paragraph essay format where it goes:

    1. Introduction and thesis statement
    2. Example one
    3. Example two
    4. Example three
    5. Conclusion

    Sorry to disappoint.

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    • Adam Fisher-CoxAdam Fisher-Cox, over 4 years ago

      A five-paragraph high-school essay isn't a good form of writing in and of itself, but it has that rigid format to teach some fundamentals which more advanced writing should also show. Just as in design, if you're confusing and losing readers, it's probably not because your readers need to be doing more work to understand what you're saying, it's because you haven't laid it out clearly enough. And it's entirely up to you if that's important to you or if the writing as-is has reached the audiences you wanted it to.

      I'm just offering my opinion since you prompted, but I see quite a few other comments on here as well pointing to suspicions that an interesting and valuable piece of opinion and analysis has been obscured by too many words.

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      • Eli SchiffEli Schiff, over 4 years ago

        Sometimes it's valid to not spell things out in advance. Perhaps there was room for giving more hints as to the final conclusion but I feel it was if not explicit, it was at least partially implicit in the early sections what was to come and my intent.

        I definitely could make my writing simpler.

        It's clear you've read it and I do appreciate your feedback. I'll consider more explicit foreshadowing next time.

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